I did this rhetorical analysis with two of my other classmates. Normally I don't like working with other students, I feel as though some work and then others get a free ride into a good grade. The two students I was fortunate enough to work with on this project were helpful and we all worked together well and created a paper that I am proud to say I was apart of. In my own revision of this analysis I took what my professor said and applied that to the piece which we created. I changed the wording so it was more impersonal, I took out the "you" statements and created the academic feeling. I revised a couple of the paragraphs and changed the layout a bit and changed some of the ideas that we stated. In the end I feel as though I created a document that you would find in a college setting written for college students, for whom it is intended for. The revisions for this piece was not as hard or as time consuming as the other pieces I revised but I feel as though the revisions I made created a stronger stated document.
I stand strong in my beliefs on what should take place when it comes to child abuse cases. Like my report which you can find directly below my position paper which is also on child abuse. Position papers aren't my specialty and while writing this I wrote and re-wrote the paper over and over trying to create a document that would portray my views in a persuasive and informative way. My audience for this piece would be the lawmakers of the country as a whole or an individual state. I am looking to pass laws and enforce them at a much higher intensity level. Something like this was difficult to accomplish I listened to the song "Concrete Angel" by Martina McBride on repeat while I was writing this for inspiration. When it came to revising my proposal I took my peer reviews into great consideration, the downfall of this was that only one of my peers reviewed my paper and their suggestions were little. However, I took what he said into great consideration and created the middle ground I was missing in a more distinct way.
In this report my research was based on what I want to go into as my career. The motivation I had for using child abuse as my topic was sparked when I was little and the passion I have for such a topic has grown into a future career. While writing my first draft of this report I was overcome with the impression to seek a professionals opinion on this very topic. I called many places with counselors to talked to and I came across LDS family services and Cynthia Hunt was more than willing to speak with me. A few days later I was sitting in the ER with my mom and had the idea to ask one of the nurses working with her what their procedures are when it comes to dealing with these cases. The information I got while working on this was more than I could ever put into a report but it was all very helpful. While thinking about who I was writing this for I decided that my intended audience is parents or future parents. I wanted to inform them of what is going on in the world around us when it comes to such a serious topic as this one. I formatted it so it could be seen in a public paper or parenting magazine. When it came to revising I changed many of my points and I took the statistics and made them bullet points to flow better and create a visual as well as the blue child abuse ribbon. A lot of the information I started with I changed, rearranged or completely took it out all together.
My proposal came from something I see almost every day. When I wrote this I was thinking about the city board and actually revising and polishing it so that I could send this to them and see if I can make a change in my own community. When I was thinking about my topic during class I had a hard time coming up with the idea until I got home and looked out my back window. A couple days later I went to the local library and did some research about my city and why the creek was still there since it's no longer in service other than the three weeks out of the year that the snow melts and it catches the water as it runs down the hill side. I took my fellow colleagues advice and really thought about all the ways I could plausibly and afforad
The following peer reviews and the ones I have conducted and the ones that have been conducted regarding my own pieces. I have taken great consideration for these reviews and applied what my peers have said about my work and changed some pieces to coincide with what they feel I needed to change. My thoughts while reading these were open minded and I looked at a few of my pieces with different eyes and was able to create what I think is my best work up to this point in my academic career.